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Still in Pyrewood

Version 4 of 11 · first seen 2026-10-11 23:01

Types of change in this version

4 recorded changes; 6 marked passages in the text.

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What changed and why

Second text revision, from the feedback round in percy-still-in-pyrewood-feedback-02.md (G1–G10). (edit)

overreach change 1 (v4-c1) jump to the passage ↓
The caption was left over from before the opening paragraph was rewritten in plan-of-change-01, and now contradicts it — the paragraph says he had quests there, the caption says he went there instead of an errand elsewhere. Replace with a caption consistent with the revised paragraph: he had quests waiting there. (Feedback G3.)
was: I had an errand elsewhere. I went the other way.
now: I had quests waiting here. That part, at least, needs no explaining.

editorial change 2 (v4-c2) jump to the passage ↓
Cut "truth" as a flourish, same category as "honest" — asserting reliability rather than stating the fact plainly. (Feedback G4.)
was: that is the plain, serviceable truth of why I went.
now: that is plainly why I went.

overreach change 3 (v4-c3) jump to the passage ↓
Cut the image entirely. It was already weakened in plan-of-change-01 by removing the invented chase framing, and neither of us can find something it's adding now. (Feedback G7.)
was: ![Percy's quest log open on a cracked stone road, one of six shackles recovered](Forever_WoWScrnShot_100826_225156.jpg "The log read one of six.")

world change 4 (v4-c4, v4-c4b, v4-c4c) jump to the passage ↓
Percy is a Forsaken warlock — cloth, not plate — per his own voice sheet. Fix the armour type and who would plausibly mend it (not a smith). (Feedback G9.)
was: the cost of having my armour repaired, twice over, by a smith who did not ask why a dead man's plate kept arriving in pieces
now: the cost of having my robes mended, twice over, by a seamstress who did not ask why a dead man's cloth kept arriving in pieces

When, and what prompted it

Plan of change written: 2026-10-11 (accepted 2026-10-11 23:00)

New version published: 2026-10-11 23:01

After-edit summary written

No review is named as the prompt for this edit.

After the edit

Objective met: yes — All four changes confirmed working by round 3's feedback — H1 for the image removal, H2 for the armour fix. One correction to the record: this plan's change 1 described the caption problem as "left over from before the opening paragraph was rewritten." Direct comparison of the real published versions (done 2026-10-12) shows that's not quite right — the caption had been changed once already, in the unplanned V2 publish, and plan-01's edit reverted it back to the original rather than ever leaving it untouched. The fix made here was correct regardless; only the stated cause of the problem was wrong.

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Still in Pyrewood

I had an errand elsewhere. I went the other way.quests waiting here. That part, at least, needs no explaining.↑1 next↓ [Picture description: A misty dawn view of Pyrewood Village below Shadowfang Keep, pines lit gold from behind, a cart standing empty in the foreground]

overreach v4-c1
change 1: The caption was left over from before the opening paragraph was rewritten in plan-of-change-01, and now contradicts it — the paragraph says he had quests there, the caption says he went there instead of an errand elsewhere. Replace with a caption consistent with the revised paragraph: he had quests waiting there. (Feedback G3.)
was: an errand elsewhere. I went the other way.
now: quests waiting here. That part, at least, needs no explaining.

I had quests waiting in Pyrewood Village, and I finished them — that is the plain, serviceable truth ofplainly↑2 next↓ why I went. What I can give no account of is why I was still there afterward, the way a tongue keeps going back to a tooth that has already stopped aching.

editorial v4-c2
change 2: Cut "truth" as a flourish, same category as "honest" — asserting reliability rather than stating the fact plainly. (Feedback G4.)
was: the plain, serviceable truth of
now: plainly

When Dalaran burned, Arugal fled south to the keep above a logging town and called worgen out of the Emerald Dream to hold a line against the Scourge. The worgen did not hold it. They turned first on the mages who had summoned them, then on the town below, and the curse meant for an enemy settled instead over Pyrewood’s own people — a thing they now carry, rather than a thing that was done to them once and finished.

Whatever waited there, I did not face it alone, though not always with the same company — more than one pairing of our own kind crossed my path there that night. One of them never let a cursed villager’s hex finish taking hold before closing the distance himself, as though patience were a tax he resented paying twice. Another was dead before I was and halfway back to fetch me before my own soul had properly left my body — a service I had not requested and have not yet found the correct tone in which to decline.

There is a particular comedy, I am told, in pulling one cursed villager cleanly from a crowd and watching it bolt rather than fight. I counted it a mercy and said so. It returned a minute later with the better part of its household.

It was not the mob that undid me, in the end. It was a tailor. A tailor, formerly of this village, now in service to a dead worgen lord, put a knife between my ribs from an angle a tradesman has no business knowing, and I went down to a backstab delivered by a man who, in life, hemmed trousers. I have killed captains. I have been finished, on this one evening, by a tailor’s knife and an elder’s temper and a watch of three that came at me together, and I confess the tailor is the one I resent. The others at least had the decency to be soldiers about it.

The log read one of six. [Picture description: Percy’s quest log open on a cracked stone road, one of six shackles recovered]

overreach v4-c3
change 3: Cut the image entirely. It was already weakened in plan-of-change-01 by removing the invented chase framing, and neither of us can find something it's adding now. (Feedback G7.)
was: The log read one of six. [Picture description: Percy's quest log open on a cracked stone road, one of six shackles recovered]

↑3 next↓You have no standing order here. Mezzlos told me, flatly, somewhere past the second death. He was not wrong, and he did not mean it as a kindness, and I did not take it as one. A warlock’s familiar keeps a ledger of what is owed him; he does not keep one of what a man owes himself, and has no opinion on why a dead thing with its errand finished would choose to keep dying in the same wood for no order anyone had given it.

The sixth shackle came in late, past the hour I had any further business in Pyrewood. I did not leave. My companions did not ask me to stay, which is, I have come to notice, rather more persuasive than if they had.

I have entered one figure in the book tonight, and underlined it, in the place where I usually put the thing that mattered: the cost of having my armour repaired,robes mended,↑4 twice over, by a smithseamstress↑4 who did not ask why a dead man’s platecloth↑4 kept arriving in pieces. It is the only accounting I have of the evening. The rest I am leaving where it sits, unexplained.

world v4-c4
change 4: Percy is a Forsaken warlock — cloth, not plate — per his own voice sheet. Fix the armour type and who would plausibly mend it (not a smith). (Feedback G9.)
was: armour repaired,
now: robes mended,
world v4-c4b
change 4: Percy is a Forsaken warlock — cloth, not plate — per his own voice sheet. Fix the armour type and who would plausibly mend it (not a smith). (Feedback G9.)
was: smith
now: seamstress
world v4-c4c
change 4: Percy is a Forsaken warlock — cloth, not plate — per his own voice sheet. Fix the armour type and who would plausibly mend it (not a smith). (Feedback G9.)
was: plate
now: cloth

Pictures

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A misty dawn view of Pyrewood Village below Shadowfang Keep, pines lit gold from behind, a cart standing empty in the foreground
caption changedI had anquests errandwaiting elsewhere.here. IThat wentpart, theat otherleast, way.needs no explaining.Description: A misty dawn view of Pyrewood Village below Shadowfang Keep, pines lit gold from behind, a cart standing empty in the foreground
Percy's quest log open on a cracked stone road, one of six shackles recovered
picture removedThe log read one of six.Description: Percy's quest log open on a cracked stone road, one of six shackles recovered